Work/Reading Details

Monday: 26 minutes reading Burned
Tuesday: 31 minutes writing cover letter
Wednesday: 17 minutes writing cover letter
Thursday: 35 minutes writing cover letter
Saturday: 21 minutes revising Morgan's paper
Sunday: 23 minutes reading Burned

Total: 49 minutes reading Burned, 83 minutes writing cover letter, and 21 minutes revising Morgan's paper

What I Want

What I want
is for 
the kids from
Sandy Hook to
hug their parents one more time.
I want innocent watchers
to be alive one more minute after 
the Boston explosions.
I want the planes to be 
turned back before they hit
the twin towers.
I would give my 
life for the lives of
others to prevent the
grief of loved ones.  

Reading/Work Times:
Monday: 17 minutes reading Burned
Wednesday: 33 minutes at the Writing Center and 14 minutes working on paper revision
Thursday: 29 minutes working on writing remix
Saturday: 21 minutes reading Burned and 18 minutes on writing remix
Sunday: 23 minutes working on paper revision

Total: 38 minutes reading Burned, 33 minutes at the writing center, 37 minutes on paper revision, and 47 minutes on writing remix

Free Poem

She woke up
relieved from her dream
to the pitter patter of rain
on the rooftop.
Sweats covered
her shaking body 
like a blanket. 
The night before
she didnt want to
go to sleep.
But couldnt
help but fall into
sleep's beckoning arms. 
She knew what would
happen if
she closed her eyes.
She knew her fears
would take over her mind.

Devices used:
1. onomatopoeia - "pitter patter"
2. simile - "like a blanket"
3. personification - "sleep's beckoning arms"

Reading Response

   Over the break, I finished reading the book Crank, by Ellen Hopkins. I read this book so I could be apart of the reading lunch so I can get a week off blog posts. I wasn't really sure what the book was going to be like or what to expect. Crank surprised me because I didn't expect the book to be about drugs, because I didn't know anything about it. But after reading it I realized I really enjoyed it, so I am now reading the next book of the series by Hopkins.

   When I was reading the book, I was surprised by some of the things that happened, like some of the things that the main character did. But I still think this is a book people should read because it is very informative. Hopkins does a great job explaining the consequences of drug and the choices you make, which affect the rest of your life. I really enjoyed the book and hope other people will read it too.

Reading Times:

Saturday: 51 minutes reading Crank

Sunday: 62 minutes reading Crank

Wednesday: 21 minutes reading Burned

Sunday: 15 minutes reading Burned

Total: 113 minutes and 178 pages in Crank and 36 minutes and 44 pages in Burned

Song Analysis

   The song I chose to analyze is a commonly known children's song. I chose "Itsy Bitsy Spider", by Mary Ann Hoberman. I chose this song because I thought it would be a simple song to analyze. The first technique i saw when I was reading the song was a rhyme scheme. The rhyme scheme goes a, b, c, b, c, a, b. This technique was easy to spot. The next one i found was the tone of the poem, which i found was it started off sad because the spider couldn't get up the water spout, but the song ends happy because the spider is able to crawl up the spout after the rain dried up. 

   The next techinique i found was consonance. I found this between the words spot and out, and the words rain and again. After looking at the song deeper, I found the technique connotations. I realized what the implyed meaning of this short story meant. I found that it describes the way people try to reach their goals, but are sometimes knocked down and have to try again. I think this is the main point and what the song is trying to get across to the listener.

My link: http://www.babycenter.com/0_lullaby-lyrics-itsy-bitsy-spider_6729.bc 

Jane Goodall plagarism

   How serious is plagiarism? Plagiarism is a serious offense for someone in school, and can cause a student to be expelled. It also can ruin someone's career if they are someone like a jounalist. Even though plagarism is not a real crime, it still has serious consequences. I think that Jane Goodall's plagarism is not very serious beacuse she apologized. She told people how it she didnt mean to and that she is very sorry if this hurt anybody. The information I needed to evaluate the situation was her background, like if she had plagiarized before, and if she had said anything publicly about it or not. 
   I think that she should fix her book and give credit where credit is due, but she should not be ridiculed because of it. To fix this situation, I think Goodall, her co-author, and publicist should revise the book and make new copies instead of selling the ones where she plagarized. I think that plagarisim is not a right thing to do, but there are some exceptions to whether or not the person is guilty. I think that Jane Goodall should not be treated unfiarly because of her mistake.

Revising

   After looking at my comments for my papers, I noticed what most of my errors were, and wrote down a list of things to correct. after looking at my list for each paper, I decided to revise the paper that i thought could benefit the most from me revising it. I chose my paper for the literacy narrative. I feel like even though i got the best grade on this paper, I could add more and add more detail to my writing. 

   The two traits I chose to focus on while revising my paper are word choice and voice. For word choice, I would like to add meaningful, engaging, and effective words that really bring my paper to life, instead of just a story being told. I need to work more on my voice so i can make the story clearer. I want to make my story unique and exciting for readers to read. I think that the comments will help me revise my paper and make it turn out even better than before.

Reading Times:

Wednesday: 38 minutes reading Crank
Thursday: 97 minutes reading
Saturday: 49 minutes reading

Total: 184 mimutes and 193 pages reading Crank